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Re : charile and the chocolate factory

  • April Sacpa
  • 2019-06-25
  • 6734


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This book is story that is about charlie and chocolate factory. It starts story about Mr.willy wonka's chocolate factory. It is the biggest and the best chocolate factory in the world. Mr. wonka noticed that fice childern will visit his factory who find a golden ticket. Then, people bought a lot of chocolate and four children-Augustus Gloop, Veruca Salt, V iolet Beauregard, and Mike Teavee-found golden tickets. Charile wanted a golden ticket, but he was so poor. When he walked back home, he found a dollar bill, and he bought two chocolate bars. And finally, he found a last golden ticket. He and other four children went to Mr.wonka's factory and they fell off one by one. Lastly, charlie left only. Mr. wonka told that he would turn over his chocolate factory to charlie. charlie wanted to go with his family, but Mr. wonka said "No". So , charlie said he wouldn't go. Finally, mr. wonka change his mind and charlie, his family and Mr.wonka lived together in the factory. Mr. wonka and charlie made chocolate together.

When I finished this book, I had very many feelings. First, I felt amazing. I love chocolate, so during I read this book, I wnat to go to the Mr.wonka's factory. And I want to eat a "Wonka's whipple-scrumptions fudgemallow Delight". I think Willy Woka was genius. How can he think out the ideas about all his choclolate? It was very amazing.

Second, I felt interesting. In chapter 20, Mr. wonka showed a stick of chewing gum to children and parents. I think this gum is so interesting. If I start chewing this gum, I can feel the food going down my throat and into my tummy. Also, I feel fill up! If this gum is real, I can eat a course menu in a low price. Well, it has a fault that in the last food-blueberyy pie-. People will finish up as a blueberries.

Last, I felt compassion. Except charlie, four children had big penalties. Augustus Glooop fell into the chocolate river and went up the pipe. Violet Beauregard changed like a blueberry. And Veruca Salt and her family was fell into the garbage chute. Mike Teavee became very small. I think they were so poor. But they could be given chocolate that they can eat many years. I felt enciable.

I recommend this book to my brother. I think he can enjoy this book. But I don't think so he can read the original. He is young, so he can think this book is difficult.

I want to find more book of Rould Dahl. His books are very fun and interesting to me. And his storys give many exitement to me. 

 

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The story is Charlie and the Chocolate factory. It is about Mr. Willy Wonka the owner of the biggest and the best chocolate factory in the world who noticed five children visiting his factory. All five children found golden tickets but before they found golden tickets they first bought chocolates. First. Augustus Gloop, Veruca Salt, Violet Beauregard, and Mike Teavee found golden tickets. Charlie wanted a golden ticket too but he didn’t get any. On his way home he found a dollar bill and bought 2 chocolate bars and finally found golden tickets in it. All five children went to Mr. Wonkas chocolate factory and they all fell and Charlie was the child who was left. Mr. Wonka told Charlie he’ll turn him over the factory. Charlie wanted to go with his family but Mr. Wonka said “NO”. And, in the end Mr. Wonka changed his mind and allowed his family to get back and they all lived and made chocolate together in the factory.

 

After reading the book, I had mixed feeling. First I felt amazed because I love chocolate. While reading the book I wanted to go to Mr. Wonka’s factory to eat "Wonka's whipple-scrumptions fudgemallow Delight". I also think that Willie Wonka is a genius because he came up with amazing ideas for the chocolates.

Secodn, I felt interested . In chapter 20, Mr. wonka showed a stick of chewing gum to children and parents. I think this gum is so interesting. If I start chewing this gum, I can feel the food going down my throat and into my tummy. Also, I feel full ! If this gum is real, I can eat a course menu in a low price.People will finish up as a blueberries.

 

Last, I felt compassion. Except Charlie, four children had big penalties. Augustus Glooop fell into the chocolate river and went up the pipe. Violet Beauregard changed like a blueberry. And Veruca Salt and her family was fell into the garbage chute. Mike Teavee became very small. I think they were so poor. But they could be given chocolate that they can eat for many years.

I will recommend this book to my brother. I think he can enjoy this book. But I don't think so he can read the original story. He is young, so he might think this book is difficult.

I want to find more books of Rould Dahl. His books are very fun and interesting to me. And his stories excite me.